Thread:RCM9698/@comment-25132749-20161215190227/@comment-29707934-20170213213257

I will write a response as soon as I can, but at the moment I just don't have the necessary time to formulate and write anything decent.

I do like your general idea fot the crystals and their powers. Just don't make space/time too overpowered (place heavy restrictions on them, just like with Esdeath in AGK). I also like the idea that Stacy's mom is an antagonsist. I find her to be a more compelling villain that a supercomputer. She could also be the right-hand woman of the computer. The chips seem to be kind of a story breaker since they render death a lot less meaningfull. Maybe you could say that they are either incredibly expensive or only very few people are compatible. There are plenty of reasons why you could implant less advanced chips with the same tracking function.