Thread:NewGenTV/@comment-29040045-20160721023603/@comment-5916303-20160721030016

While not incorrect, your edits on Tatsumi's page are not properly worded and do not match up with the rest of the section's description. You should more or less avoid using "but" to negate the previous action and state something along the lines of "after the " or "following the events of". Using words such as "handsome" is an opinion rather than a descriptive term.