Thread:RCM9698/@comment-25132749-20161215190227/@comment-29707934-20170819133545

You could make a magic system where different substances are targeted (organic/anorganic), divide "the natural elements" (such as water or fire, but the actual elements like hydrogen) affected.... You could also makje the elements are race that, despite having good intentions, created a lot of problems/weapons to.

The fact that "the void dragon" whose name I would change, is inside the MC's head can be very interesting if done correctly for reasons I already explained.

Yes, but NGE (Neon Genesis Evangelion, I assume) has a very different story. Despite them having to pilot EVA's, they still have a guardian/corporation that takes care of them for everything else. Your characters are on the run from a corporation, and have to be entirely self-sufficient. That asks for far more maturity and experience, and NGE shows very good why  lacking that is a problem. That's why I think twelve is way too young for being alone on the run. They are still in elementary schooI, and they have to face a megacorporation and save the universe? Sorry, I just can't take that seriously. think twelve is really unbelievable, and even 14-15 would be pushing. But it's your story and your choice.