Thread:RCM9698/@comment-25132749-20161215190227/@comment-29707934-20170718024910

I always copy my answer before I reply, just to be safe.

No, that's completely wrong. I can easily give many examples were the rich and powerful aren't necessary bad parents. The overwhelming majority actually. I honestly don't get how you can say such a misinformed statement. Just go to any manga site and start looking at the popular manga. Also, it's not because there are examples in a series that it aplies to all rich people in the series. It's a trope that's mostly used is series without much dept. But since this is the AGK! wiki, let's look at it. Even if the series is about a corrupt Empire/Elite, they still aren't terrible parents. Honest is, but everything about him is evil. A few examples: Aria was loved by her parents despite them all being psycho's, the former prime minister was close with his daughter. We also have Bols, who is pretty succesful, and his family. There's nothing to suggest Nobles are bad parents in general. Lets also note the fact Akame and Kurome were literally sold to the Empire by their parents as well as the fact that many parents don't even seem to be around and are perfectly happy with letting their children fight. Their are several manga where the rich don't care about the wellbeing of the poor, but not that many (succesful/popular ones at least) were they are all bad parents. And that's a good thing, since that's just bad writing.

A brain that's partially mechanical just seems weird to me because it's so unrealistic. I don't like the idea since it theoretically wouldn't work (very well, at least). I know it's fantasy, but I think their are better ways to introduce such a struggle. The shock that she was somehow controlled by her mother either psychological or by something like drugs that somewhat alter her personality) would work just as well and wouldn't be so needlessy complex/weird.

It's a good idea the lessen the amount of factions so that you have more time to focus on each on them and their goals without making the story drag or overly complex. It's a good idea to rework the objects as artifacts. Also, their is plenty of classical literature (Dante's Inferno), mythology or just the Bible that you can use for naming suggestions for angels and demons.

Your idea for the villain could work but I would make him human. It would also be better if he sells products that could be dangerous when activated by the corporation or something. It would be fairly obvious if he sold things that were outright dangerous. People would catch on quickly.

If I were you, I would focus on just one project at the time and just start. Maybe ypu fail, but you will have learned something. It will also give us something more concrete to discuss.