Thread:RCM9698/@comment-25132749-20161215190227/@comment-29707934-20170122223522

I thought that you were going to use more characters in the story than Tatsumi and Mine. I don't think they alone are able to create an interesting plot. The problem with them when compared to for example Wave and Kurome is that they are both rather generic characters and there relationship and interactions aren't even slightly developed. Their relationship is to shallow and  just isn't interesting enough to make for an interesting story. I know you like the pairing, but in the manga their relationship really comes out of nowhere and was barely explained. I would add another character to create more interesting interactions. Also, you should beware that you don't create to many powerful opponents. If your characters' power and skill are like in the series, there is no way that for example Mine could hope to defeat (an eventually enhanced) Akame. I doubt that she would even last three minutes. If you create to many strong opponents, you will need to defeat them with plot contrived nonsense. That's just not any fun to read.

I like your idea for the noble's death. It would indeed be a fitting death for a noble and set the tone for your story. That's why I would make it take place in the beginning of your story. The beating quota is also a plot device that shows the problems the people face under Combine rule. Having Lubbock kill Najenda is also tragic because of their relationship, so that certainly could work. I can't really say if it's good or bad that other characters except Najenda know about the advisors.

That are indeed good reasons to make them hate the Combine and motivate them to be involved with the revolution. You can also add some slaughtered comrades to make it more personal.