Thread:Davin111/@comment-29707934-20170214220316/@comment-29707934-20170217224303

I have finally finished my response. I hope my critism is useful for you. It's not a problem for me that you're stubborn. After all I am not trying to change your mind, I am just giving my opinion based on either what I like or what people seem to like in general. I think scaling down to two universes is a great idea. You already have your fantasy and science fiction universe then. That allows nearly everything, there's really no need to add more universes in my opinion. This is what I mean about many of your ideas, by scaling and/or narrowing them down they would not only work much better, they would also allow for a more cohesive story.

While their backgrounds are certainly different, Mine an d Stacy seem to posses a fair amount of similarities in th eir personalitity. The fact that they both use guns, really come through for their comrades in a fight, her personality and h er behaviour towards the MC just stike me as rather similair. While it's not a secret I find Mine (and Tatsumi, Honest and to a lesser extend Esdeath)  rather generic characters and not very interesting because of that, It doesn't mean that I don't think that Stacy can be an interesting character. It's just that their characters give me a similair feel. That's of course based on how you have described Stacy to me. Also note that similar is not necessary the same.

Sidenote: If the corporation forced Stacy to act a certain way and to make certain decisions, you could also say that she was opressed (which I am not saying she was, I am saying that's how you could write it into the story). Of course, that would be in a far less violent and traumatic way compared to what happend to Mine.