Thread:RCM9698/@comment-25132749-20161215190227/@comment-29707934-20170211172735

I agree with you that open endings are better than cliffhangers. However, what you say applies mainly to tv-series, it's almost unheard of in literature. Cave Johnson is a good choice, since he seems to take more risks than GLaDOS.

I meant the "main female character" as in  "the most important female character",  and not "the MC that's female". Personally I would always pick a MC with the same gender as I am. It's just easier to write them realistically, especially when romance is involved. That's also why I would make the MC also human.

While I like dark fantasy worlds and I get why you would pick this kind of plot. I'm beginning to understand your taste after all. However, I think that the plot is way to fragmented and convoluted at the moment. It's more like a plot that incorporates several different series. Don't get me wrong, it's fine to create a complex narrative with many characters and intrigue, but their should be a relatively clear "main goal". For example, Harry Potter and The Lord of the Rings have complex worlds with many intrigues, but their overall goal remains clear (destroy Voldemort/stop Sauron's armies and throw the ring in Mount Doom). Your story (go to a fantasy world that invaded by an very advanced corporation, who scatters the objects you have to find. Also, don't forget the unite several races for your quest across the multiverse and oppose some cruel gods at the end. And than we haven't even mentioned the politics between the factions, human supremacy and racism, the interaction between magic and technology,...). That's just way to much for a coherent narrative that people want to follow. I would start by scrapping a few ideas or starting with a few different series. For example: one about a guy trying to climb up/work for an advanced organization but becomes conflicted about their methods, another story about a guy that's transported to a magical kingdom where he decides to battle the gods that opress the people,.... I just made this up and it's not like you can't combine fantasy and science fiction, but I really think the plot is way to chaotic as it is.

The other story also doesn't really sound like my cup of tean and I would rethink the Martian Brain (that's to much bad comedy in my opinion). But the overall story is much more promising because it's much more focused. You can make the "side plots" as divers and complex as you want, but it's good to have a solid "general tone". Just a reminder, I don't mean any of this in an offensive or unfriendly way. I just want to honestly point out the flaws I see with some of your ideas.